Friday 18th September 2015
Once there was a zoo keeper called Mr Gringling. At night time he lived in a white hotel in the
woods. In the day time he shot on a zip wire to his zoo to clean and sweep the
cages.
Each morning while Mr Grinling swept the poo Mrs Grinling
worked in the kitchen making a delicious lunch for him. Once she prepared the
lunch she packet it into a special basket and clipped it on a wire to the zoo.
You have written a lovely story, well done! You have lots of detail and interesting adjectives. Next time, why don't you try using some different sentence openers?
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