Daylam
25.09.17
Dear Mr Grinling,
We are sorry for eating your lunch.Do you like peach
supprise a or delicious sandwich.I like peach supprise.We ate your lunch
because our boss Rock told us to.My friends helped me and we took it because we
went on a journey and we didn’t.We all ate it sorry .Can you give us food then
we will stop.I am going to tell my boss stop telling me to eat your lunch if he
says that again im never going to talk to him ever again Do you want to be
friends.
Hi seagulls,
I’am happy that you
wrote the email to me although I was angry when you ate my lunch.I am sorry
because I didn’t know that you wanted lunch.
I like it that you wrote a reply as well as your email. At the end though, I think you forgot about full stops and capital letters.
ReplyDeletewell done daylam. your writing is so good.
ReplyDeleteI realy liked your story but maybe you could add some conjunctions like and but so or.
ReplyDeleteGood job
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