Rafsan
25.9.17
Hi Mr Grinnling ,
We had a terrible day! We wanted to apoligise to you for
eating your scrumptious lunch. There was a storm last night and the sea was
going wild! We felt terrible.
The sea was scaring all the fish away so we were starving!
We felt like having a scrumptious lunch. Our stummucks was rumbling like a rhino stumbling on our
tummies. When the storm stopped we saw some fish laying on the ground but it
didn’t look nice. We were hungry so we ate it. We were drifting through the air
and looking around food.
Just then we smelt something that we ate before but it was
some fish. We smelt a scrumptious lunch and our beaks were dribbling and we
followed the smell although it was a basket full of food.
We saw the basket falling through and it went into our sharp
yellow talons but we had the basket.
We ate your lunch however the biscuits were crunchy.
It was perfect
ReplyDeleteit was fantastic. did you remember your fullstops.
ReplyDeleteSO GOOD
ReplyDeleteHi rafsan good story its very long and fantastice. Did you remember capitail letters and fall stops. good describing words.
ReplyDeleteRafsan I love your work.How do you concentrate and write very much?
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ReplyDeletelove writing I love how you added ajectives!
hello Rafsan I like your writing because you added lots of ajectis and you added the word scrumptoiun from. from Arafat
ReplyDeleteRafsan I love your story. can you write the whole story
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